And, now, the philosophical question of identity peeks out from behind a fog of meaninglessness. If, piece by piece, you turn yourself into a cyborg, and then into an android, can you step into the same river twice?
I feel like I should give you better criticism, since your criticism is so much more insightful than mine..heh...
I guess I'm kind of wary about criticism ever since I took a theater criticism course, and just kind of got burnt out with it...
I did notice the panel layout, and how it's like mimicking a spiral galaxy and has a floaty feel to it. It's a lot more complicated than your other layouts in this series, but I didn't have a hard time following it at all...
The backgrounds look like you put quite a bit of time into working out those patterns (the pattern for the cosmos reminds me of the patterns on certain kinds of old kitchen countertops..particularly in the first panel)..the galaxy has a nice glowy/smeared white texture to it too...the things in the last panel look like amoebas viewed under a microscope...
Did you intentionally leave Pointless Man himself plain looking in comparison, for contrast? He looks like he might be an old timey bar tender too...I've considered getting myself a pair of suspenders...
That's about all...usually when I try to give criticism it devolves into me making inane observations/asides, but I suppose it's a little helpful to know what people think about something, even if they can't show you the way to improve.
PM was left plain because that's his style. But, if I had decided to add more detail to his person for some reason, I would have had to make the backgrounds less involved, so as to not overtax the reader's eye (which I think the first panel might do anyway) or confuse it.
Each panel originally had a caption, a feature which was scrapped in a silly attempt to bring cohesiveness to the page as a whole. They were as follows: panel 1 - Pig fingers! Carrot hands! Cannot draw! panel 2 - Focus off. panel 3 - Perspective is a matter of perspective. panel 4 - What, me worry? In thinking about it, I suppose I might have impanelled these in the orange bar at the right, but it probably would've been a bit much. ... I'm not sure how wide-spread the campaign is, but in Seattle, there are numerous billboards and bus signs which read, "Jesus is ____." I want to play mad libs with these things, or else write in, "a day labourer." Other acceptable answers include, "bearded," and, "featured in a Leonard Cohen song."
This one feels like an interlude in a story..but maybe i'm only thinking that because of the other Pointless Man series..
ReplyDeleteI like the way you drew/shaded the coat in the first panel..
an impersonal concatenation of objects...that's awesome..it sounds like something I could aspire to be...
Easily accomplished in death. Less cheaply so by the process of becoming a cyborg.
ReplyDeleteCyborg might be more appropriate, as long as I"m programmed in an object oriented language....
ReplyDeleteAnd, now, the philosophical question of identity peeks out from behind a fog of meaninglessness. If, piece by piece, you turn yourself into a cyborg, and then into an android, can you step into the same river twice?
ReplyDeleteI just wanted you to know that I actually seriously considered that dilemma.
ReplyDeletenot that I came up with a good answer....
ReplyDeleteI feel like I should give you better criticism, since your criticism is so much more insightful than mine..heh...
ReplyDeleteI guess I'm kind of wary about criticism ever since I took a theater criticism course, and just kind of got burnt out with it...
I did notice the panel layout, and how it's like mimicking a spiral galaxy and has a floaty feel to it. It's a lot more complicated than your other layouts in this series, but I didn't have a hard time following it at all...
The backgrounds look like you put quite a bit of time into working out those patterns (the pattern for the cosmos reminds me of the patterns on certain kinds of old kitchen countertops..particularly in the first panel)..the galaxy has a nice glowy/smeared white texture to it too...the things in the last panel look like amoebas viewed under a microscope...
Did you intentionally leave Pointless Man himself plain looking in comparison, for contrast? He looks like he might be an old timey bar tender too...I've considered getting myself a pair of suspenders...
That's about all...usually when I try to give criticism it devolves into me making inane observations/asides, but I suppose it's a little helpful to know what people think about something, even if they can't show you the way to improve.
PM was left plain because that's his style. But, if I had decided to add more detail to his person for some reason, I would have had to make the backgrounds less involved, so as to not overtax the reader's eye (which I think the first panel might do anyway) or confuse it.
ReplyDeleteAnd I appreciate your thoughts, as always.